Last week, I attended the annual University of California conference where UC admissions people discuss admissions issues. One hot topic of conversation in many of the presentations were the new University of California personal statement prompts. The presenters had some excellent advice for students applying to the UC system this year, some of which is applicable for writing any college essay. I'll review the more general advice first, then move on to specific information on the new UC Personal Statement prompts that students.
Great ideas for any student writing college application essays:
-- Allow plenty of time. Don't start writing your college essays the week before the admissions deadline. A good essay requires thought, revision, and careful proofreading. The more time you allow, the better your essay is likely to be.
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The essay is only as good as the application it completes. Before you begin writing, complete the rest of the application. Then, review it and your transcript through the eyes of an admissions officer. If you were an admissions officer reading this application with this transcript, what information would you have about this student after reading it? What patterns would you see in this student's academic choices and performance? In his or her extracurriculars and personal data? What inferences would you draw about this applicant? What questions would you ask about this student before you read his or her essays? What additional information would you hope to learn about this applicant from his or her essays?
-- Next, ask yourself: What do I want my essays/personal statement to add to my application? What is the most important thing about myself I hope to convey that supports and adds to the picture the rest of my application will create in an admissions officer's mind? What topics might best convey that information? Will my essay topic align with the rest of my application materials? What is most important for a reader to understand about me after they read my essay or personal statement?
-- Focus, focus, focus. Don't try to do too much in your essay or personal statement. At the same time, go beyond the superficial. Don't just provide factual information in your essay. Dig deeper to show the reader the
personal meaning and significance of the events, facts, or experiences you're discussing in your essay.
-- Ask for feedback from a teacher or another adult who knows you well. However, don't just give this person your essay to read. Give them your entire application and your transcript so they can put your essays in proper context. Ask this person to comment on your ideas and the level of persuasiveness of your essay, not grammar.
-- Rewrite and polish. Then, ask an English teacher or another person familiar with strong writing skills to proof your final draft for grammar.
Advice for students working on their University of California Personal Statements:
-- The UC application this year will include two prompts for freshman applicants and an additional information section. The two prompts for this year are:
1. Describe the world you come from - for example, your familiy, community or school - and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.
2. Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplshment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
-- Students have 1,000 words to answer both prompts. A little longer (say 1050 words) is fine, but the online system will not accept over 1100 words. You can divide up the 1,000 words between the two prompts however you think is best, but the University of California admissions officers stressed that they believe that answers should be a MINIMUM of 250 words in order to convey enough information for the UC readers to gather enough information to make an admissions decision.
-- In the first prompt, the "tell us about your world" prompt, the UC admissions people are not looking for details about every part of your world. They don't want to hear about your school AND your family AND your community. Instead, they hope applicants will focus in on the part of their world that has been most responsible for shaping the applicant's "dreams and aspirations." Make sure the essay doesn't waste too much space describing "your world" -- this is a
Personal Statement, and readers are looking for information about YOU not detailed descriptions of your neigborhood, school or family. Be sure to explain how your environment has shaped and changed you.
-- In the second prompt, don't merely repeat information that the admissions reader can find elsewhere in your application. Dig deeper than the factual data you've already provided -- tell a UC reader why this particular accomplishment or achievement matters to you, how it reflects who you are, and why you are proud of it (i.e., what challenges did you face, what did you learn about yourself, etc.)
-- The additional information section, which allows for 500 words, is the place to discuss any administrative or factual information that you could not include elsewhere on your application. For instance, if you were unable to take a fourth year of foreign language due to a scheduling problem beyond your control, indicate it here. If there is specific information about your family situation that you believe is important but which you didn't cover in the two prompts, note that information here. However, the UC admissions officers stressed that they are not looking for a third essay in this section, and they do not expect every student to write something in this section.
Good luck with your Personal Statements and essays!